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What do you want when you read any poem?
Should it sound like those in an ancient tome;
And have flowing patterns of chiming rhymes,
With a constant meter and length of lines?
Would you like lovely lies of love lit eyes
And finds of floral features in her guise?

Or should I stop and break into cacophony?
Add harsh, stiff, piercing terminology,
Talk of darkness, death, your soul being rent;
Heartbreak causing shame and hatred and blame.
And I’ll break from my patterns - confuse your expectations
Of this poem by ending in
The wrong places and putting rhymes inside the lines, but not at the ends.

But maybe you’d like that, and I’d hate pleasing you.
So I’ll just keep rhyming by adding shoe.
Go back to my meter of gentle rolls,
That you might recite on your daily strolls;
Or maybe you’d ignore on most nights.
But I’ll stay here, because that’s how I write.
©2004-2009 ~Ramuel
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Whatev.
I don't actually always use meter and rhyme, it was just a good way to end the poem (I usually do, though).
Daily Deviation, 2004-04-09

Daily DeviationCacophany by *Ramuel I happen to love a good rhyming poem, (not everyone can do it well you know), but this poet does. Cacophany plays with you just a little, talks about the sound and then puts it in unexpected places. The rhythm is not destroyed but it does make you laugh and that, especially, gave this poem DailyD. (Featured by °jsenn)

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Yay, this is great!
you sound overly sarcastic, therefore, I dont believe you
You just want me to sound sarcastic because you dont want anyone to like your work, but I dont sound sarcastic because I really like this poem.
well written and expressed

"Would you like lovely lies of love lit eyes"
good line


-blaze...

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I'm a perfectionist and a fuck up.
not your best work, however, for someone who does not normally use rhyme and meter, i think you did very well. The word choice was not spectacular, but it was better then i normally see. Very well done, and as usual your flow was great.

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Aspire to be yourself.
I like it, but your other work Is much better. :D still good

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:D I forgot you're watching me. Or at least were.
Great poem btw! I've read better ones of yours though :aww:
:) Well, I'm glad you stopped by! Glad you liked it.
Thanks man, I apriciate your comment. I wrote this whole thing pretty fast, but I do like that line, myself. Thanks. :)


-Ramuel

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