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Look who's finally run from home.
Its silly, but there it is,
with hope and forethought,
aspiration and what naught,
I can see, he's run from home.

Ready for his own life,
with his own dreams;
making it with his own skills -
with his own beliefs,
and making it work.

Ready to struggle a bit,
but enjoy it a lot;
to learn from mistakes
and eat of his own crop.
Ready to work his fields,
ready to tend his flock.
He just wants the chance
to show what he's got.

Ready to make his own things,
with sweat and patience;
to wake up in the morning,
and feel yesterday's ache.
Go to bed at night with one that he loves,
hold her tight, all night.

In his thoughts he's already gone,
run away from home,
sang his own song,
Home's where he's run from,
but thats where he's running to.

He's ready to go.
©2004-2009 ~Ramuel
:iconramuel:

Author's Comments

Just wrote this in about 10 mins, so there is probably plenty of things to point out for me to fix/change.
I think this is where I'm at in my life, you know?
Hopefully, some can relate.

Somehow I doubled the first two stanzas when I fist submitted this.
Its fixed now.

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:iconpanther-nora:
Wow, that's really good.
I cant really see anything I would change.
:iconmarinatsunamia:
I think it's fine the way it is. Really wonderful :D I can almost relate, but yet I'm not completly there. I'm not ready to leave home no matter how much my mind keeps telling me that I can make it on my own.

Still love your work ^_^ they are really a joy to read.

--
:bulletred:Strawberry Fields Forever
~Help it flourish.
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:iconcaptain-amazing:
great poem, and a nice concept. it is a good state to be in, i think.
very nicely written :nod:
:iconramuel:
Thanks for the comment!
:iconramuel:
Thanks for the comment.

-Ramuel
:iconahmose:
the amount of time spent on a poem makes no difference, especially if you write from the soul like you do. Well done my friend :)

--
Aspire to be yourself.
:iconramuel:
Thanks, Ahmose.
:iconfat-lionell:
looks good to me.

--
To believe in love is foolish...To fall in love is Hell.

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