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If the moon falls down from heaven;
crashes through the earth to Hell,
and the sky turns dark in anguish,
with its lover's light withheld,
and time stops to see the descent;
looks down and looses it’s resolve,
and the Sun tries until its spent,
but cannot mend what has been lost;
I will still have all I need;
I will have love and strength from you.

If I wake to find all the world against me,
hatred thrown at me in all their words;
if an army takes me for their enemy,
and I am left dead on the black shores;
if I am accused a criminal,
and imprisoned forever more,
I will be able to survive it all,
I will find asylum always in your love.

Your love is the key to my strength;
It is the firefly in my pitch black night;
It is something which words cannot express –
This feeling between you and I.

If the moon falls down from heaven;
crashes through the earth to Hell,
and the sky turns dark in anguish,
with its lover's light withheld,
and time stops to see the descent;
looks down and looses it’s resolve,
and the Sun tries until it’s spent,
but cannot mend what has been lost;
I’ll tell them of your love for me;
They'll understand, and all will be assuaged.
:iconramuel:
I submitted this before and it was actually my most popular peice, so I thought I would try to make it better and resubmit it(I took the old one down). If you faved it before, I hope you arent dissapointed.
please comment, its what I live for.
good, bad, nothing - any comment will do.
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:iconmrmojo77665544:
Oh man, this is truly beautiful. It's been a long time since i've read something thats touched me here on DeviantArt, thank you. I'm gonna go rummage through all of your works now ;)
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~squee17 Apr 9, 2004   Photographer
inspirational work man. especially the last verse. i can not even imagine the blind faith required to hold such sentiments. nor can i imagine a love of the strength and magnitude that you so beautifully describe, although it is most obviously my own loss.

congratulations, you have single-handedly rekindled my faith in poetry. :)
+devwatch
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:iconramuel:
:) I hope I can live up to it...
Thank you.


-Ramuel
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:iconjsenn:
Excellent! It is a beautiful love poem and this line made me stop, "It is the firefly in my pitch black night;". I don't know, I love the rhyme, I love the rhythm, I love the visions...haha, mabe I do love, love, yeah!
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:iconramuel:
Wow, I'm honored to get a comment from you. I havent had any staff comment on any of my stuff before, and I suppose its quite fitting that the poet lauriate would be the first.
When I got to that point in the poem I was like, I really need to have a line that people will catch in here," so I thought for a while, and came up with a completely different line. Then later when I was revising this poem I suddenly got that line, which I still think could be better, but I am quite harsh on myself. Its a great thing to love love, thats what its all about sometimes.


-Ramuel
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:iconramuel:
Thanks, I'm glad you liked it.

-Ramuel
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:iconjeido-hoshi:
i like ur icon too
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:iconramuel:
thanks, I like it alot, too. :)
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